STORY STARTER
You slide the bag across the table, the hooded figure opposite you peers inside. "Where the hell did you find this?!"
Continue this dialogue.
Cloak And Dagger
This is really good! Love all the description. Just a few things:
“If one stood face to face with him, they could feel the hot sparks on his breath, hear his rugged airflow attempting to fill larger than usual lungs.”
I think would might work better than could in this context, and larger than usual should probably be hyphenated (larger-than-usual).
Also, “this one was missing the high and mighty oh so important air of other dragons.”
You might want to put a comma after mighty to break it up, and “oh so important” could be hyphenated (all though it doesn’t necessarily need to be, up to you). Keep up the good work!
Your writing is really good! Have you considered making a part two of this? I would love to read it