WRITING OBSTACLE
Describe an action scene in detail, so the reader can clearly picture the movement and atmosphere of the scene.
Be sure to use descriptive language that help readers identify space, movement, direction, tension, sounds etc.
A Failed Attack
I glanced at my partner over the little wall on the roof I’d positioned myself on top of. I waited...5..4..3..2..1...and
Go! I jumped the two stories with a swift tuck and roll. As I bounced back up I was already diving a mid swing attack from one Jackal’s minions. I then pulled back and gave him a good right hook in the jaw;hard enough to knock him out. I glanced at Jesse to see how she was fairing fighting off three guys; two armed and one brick wall of muscle. She’d just disarmed one and chucked the brick wall at the second armed guy. I twirled into a side kick in the gut of the guy that just tried ramming into me from the left. Then I twisted back around to ram my knee where it hurts at the guy thinking he could come up behind me and remain unharmed. To finish him off I grabbed the back of his neck and slammed his head into my knee and knocked him out. When I saw that Jesse had the rest taken care of I headed up to the metal staircase at the side of the building to go after Jackal himself.
When I walked into the room that appeared to be some sort of office I was surprised to see Jackal twist around in the spinning chair. He didn’t appear to be ready for a fight.
“Ahh I assume you’ve taken care of my men. I figured you would but it took you approximately three minutes longer than I expected.”
I glared at him, “ We’ll did you count the time it takes to take two flights of stairs.”
“Yes, I did indeed.”
I rolled my eyes. Small talk with bad guys never really was my thing.
“All right Jackal lets just cut to the chase already.”
“Ahh always so impatient.”
I growled at him. I then rushed to the side to gain momentum from the brick wall and flipped into a tackle. Only, I didn’t hit Jackal... I hit the floor ...hard. I got up rubbing my side and saw Jackal - flickering...
I slapped my hand to my face feeling my stupidity sting.
Jackal was using a hologram.