POEM STARTER
Write a Tanka that focuses on the theme of new relationships.
A Tanka is a short form of poetry with 5 lines; 5 syllables in the first line, then 7, then 5, then 7, and 7 in the last (5,7,5,7,7).
The One
our souls dance all night
my heart whispers, stay with me
pull me closer dear
fingers run along smooth skin
finally, i’ve found the one
I love it! Each word had a purpose and really did paint a picture. I can see your words, if that makes any sense.
yes it makes sense haha that’s what i was hoping for ☺️ i’m glad you liked it :)
The imagery in this was amazing!! The details were just enough to make us really “feel” with the characters in the poem without being too extraneous. I only have one thing— to me “dear” sounds more motherly than something that would be said between 2 lovers, and I feel like it could be taken out (but again that’s just a personal opinion, it’s good with too!) Overall beautiful poem, really well done! 👏👏
i was kinda on the fence about using dear so i totally understand haha. thank you for the criticism and compliments 💛
