The One
our souls dance all night
my heart whispers, stay with me
pull me closer dear
fingers run along smooth skin
finally, iโve found the one
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our souls dance all night
my heart whispers, stay with me
pull me closer dear
fingers run along smooth skin
finally, iโve found the one
I love it! Each word had a purpose and really did paint a picture. I can see your words, if that makes any sense.
The imagery in this was amazing!! The details were just enough to make us really โfeelโ with the characters in the poem without being too extraneous. I only have one thingโ to me โdearโ sounds more motherly than something that would be said between 2 lovers, and I feel like it could be taken out (but again thatโs just a personal opinion, itโs good with too!) Overall beautiful poem, really well done! ๐๐
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