STORY STARTER
Write a love story set in an aquarium.
You don’t need to stick to humans as the romantic characters for this story...
STORY STARTER
Write a love story set in an aquarium.
You don’t need to stick to humans as the romantic characters for this story...
A delightful short tale! 😃
What do you think about staying with ‘aquatic’ imagery and instead of ‘quake’ something like ‘tsunami’?: “His eyes swiveled back to the fish and his mind was a tsunami full of possibility…”
Again ‘aquatic’ imagery for fun?: “…but his feet were like two ton anchors…”
How about this be it’s own paragraph to really draw attention to it?: “Lenin was left reeling.”
And how about here to hold that pause, “A brief quiet.” as a paragraph of its own?
The beginning and end work very well with their ‘waddles’, creating a full circle effect!
Well done!