WRITING OBSTACLE
Your character has the ability to see people's internal qualities represented externally in their appearance.
Describe some of the things they see.
WRITING OBSTACLE
Your character has the ability to see people's internal qualities represented externally in their appearance.
Describe some of the things they see.
I really like you characterization in this piece. Your character was very easy to connect with and understand as well as being really like-able.
The imagery is also amazing with the way you describe the people’s textures. great job!
I noticed you use a lot of periods where commas, semi-colons, and colons could be. I had a bit of trouble with commas lol. I recommend taking some time to learn how to use them
this
“He had crazy and vastly different tattoos across his skin. A dolphine, a car, a flower.”
to this
“He had crazy and vastly different tattoos across his skin: A dolphine, a car, a flower.”
also try adding more commas, like here:
“My face crinkles in digust. Ugh. Paper straws.”
when you get the hang of this your writing will shine even brighter then it already is. Good luck!