Life without you. What a way to live.
It’s no way to live, to not have loved.
The pieces in which you loved me,
I’d gladly hold close every day.
Even though it was not your whole heart,
I had the most joy I’ve ever had.
And I want it back.
This is beautiful and sweet 💚 I especially love its brevity, as you cover a lot of ground and your words remain powerful.
“The pieces in which you loved me” - is such lovely imagery.
As for feedback regarding beginning & end, I’d say you could get away with starting at “It’s no way to live…” Then it could make your final line twice as powerful and potentially a plot twist. Hopefully this helps!
