STORY STARTER
She laughed, and if I hadn’t been so relieved to see her alive, I might have laughed too.
Write a short story ending with this line. What have these characters gone through to make laughter so valuable?
STORY STARTER
She laughed, and if I hadn’t been so relieved to see her alive, I might have laughed too.
Write a short story ending with this line. What have these characters gone through to make laughter so valuable?
💥’We had found refuge in the bones of the old temple, one of the last forged links between the two kingdoms.’💥
A clue, and deepening mystery- ‘I’d been playing in the meadow, just beyond the castle, when tremor had shaken the earth, and clouds black as night choked the sky.’
✨’The temple had been hit…until I met her.’✨
Then we’ll placed- ‘My Jude.’
Lovey imagery- ‘I’d stared at Jude… deathly scarlet.’
😥’Her skin had felt cold- a sheet of thin, delicate ice. I hadn’t wanted to press too hard, not wanting her to shatter.’
Then the tangible hope- ‘“It’s faint,” Nelly said softly, “but there is still a pulse,’
Then a wonderful step down through the emotions!
Wow- But it was fear that won. A late audition but just as powerful. I had to take a moment outside.’
👏🏻’White, they shone like teeth- a guarding, gnashing beast of their own.’👏🏻
Nice- ‘Thin veins now cracked across her skin, pulsing like rivulets of lava.’
Can clearly see this! ‘Heat flushed every crevice of my body, and I ignored the sharp twitch of Mason’s smirk.’
😥😯‘ A last ember of life.’😯😥
Then that last line, took the last whisker of my breath! The emotions are so tangible, the imagery was stunning, it felt like I was truly a witness of this scene!
Beautiful to read, as I sit in the garden with my chickens!
And I hope you have had a lovely weekend!☺️
Lovely, mysterious, intriguing first line!
Wonderful rhythm developing plot and story so quickly, and then the sudden pivot of: “…until I met her. // My Jude.” Perfecto!
Maybe some ellipses for a draaaaaaaamatic stretch?!: “…my Jude, beside him (her hand holding his, wet with her sobs)… her life a fingertip from the hands of the reaper.”
Great description of the skin!
✨✨✨”the previous thump-thump of life”✨✨✨
Great image with ‘first chair’ and ‘audition’!!!
I think shatters here (and maybe add ‘shards’): “…shattered (shatters and shards) of glass stretched high…”
Oh, I see you use ‘shards’ later…maybe splinters with roof tiles?
Oh no, not Seuphus!
✨✨✨🌸A True Kiss Flower🌸✨✨✨
Fantastic last line!
What fun to read before my day starts!
Really liked this one!