WRITING OBSTACLE
Write a story from a character who is so over-dramatic that it is a struggle to understand the tale they're trying to tell you.
Make use of drama and hyperbole, and consider the language used by your character.
WRITING OBSTACLE
Write a story from a character who is so over-dramatic that it is a struggle to understand the tale they're trying to tell you.
Make use of drama and hyperbole, and consider the language used by your character.
Oh, and congratulations on your 100th writing! 🎉 🎈 😃
This is awesome. 😁 I don’t think there are any better words to describe it. Here are some things that I found…
“I can hear Madison let out a small sigh, but quickly correct it with a smile.” —> I can hear Madison let out a small sigh, but she quickly corrects it with a smile. (I don’t think there were supposed to be quotations there, correct me if I’m wrong!)
“Oh my gosh” she cries out. “Guys, I literally almost died.” —> “Oh my gosh,” she cries out, “guys, I literally almost died.” (A little bit of grammar mechanics to be fixed there! I apologize, I’m quite the grammar freak! 😅)
“Maybe this is something you should bring up to your therapist?“ I ask. —> “Maybe this is something you should bring up to your therapist?“ I ask, trying hard not to let the laugh inside of me reveal itself in my voice.” (I feel like adding a bit to this would help with show and not tell! 😉)
“Gabby came running to the room, balling here eyes out with mascara dripping down her plastic face.” —> “Gabby came running into the room, balling her eyes out with mascara dripping down her plastic face.” (Plastic face? Is that a little harsh? Also getting Mean Girls vibes! 👠💄)
Some of my favorite lines~~ ✨✨✨
“Sometimes tough love is what it takes to smack someone back into reality.” 🙌💪
“I can hear Madison let out a small sigh, but quickly correct it with a smile.” 🙃🫢
“”Do you want to talk about it?” I ask, hoping she will dismiss me.” 🤣👏
Anyways, this was such a great writing and please don’t feel inclined to take any of my feedback, for it is merely just suggestions that came from my exhausted brain this Sunday morning. Hope you are having a marvelous day and Happy Holidays! ❄️🎄🎁