WRITING OBSTACLE
Write a scene that conveys deep emotion without using any dialogue.
You can explore any emotion you’d like, but try to focus on actions and body language of the characters. Remember, no dialogue.
How Did It Ever Come To This
I hear him come in, and my blood already starts boiling. Without saying a word, he throws his jacket over the chair for the umpteenth time instead of hanging it in the hallway where it belongs. I roll my eyes but decide not to say anything. I don’t feel like having yet another fight. I grab the TV remote and put on my favorite show, Home and Away. I hear him rummaging in the cupboard, and he sits down next to me on the couch without a word, holding a bag of M&Ms. He probably grabbed that just to annoy me, I think bitterly. He noisily opens the bag and starts chewing loudly. I roll my eyes again and turn the TV up a little louder. Loudly munching, he scrolls on his phone. I glance at him in disgust..How on earth did I ever fall in love with him?
Comments 2
The word “Umpteenth” threw me off
Way too much detail I say
Thank you for your honest feedback! Just a small tip, your feedback could be phrased a bit more kindly and with more explanation to make it more constructive. But I do appreciate you taking the time to read my piece, so thanks for that