There was a pack of 7 snow white wolves staring right at me. Their piercing ice blue eyes staring intelligently directly into my eyes.
Authors Note: this story is so short because I wanted to keep my streak. But I will be continuing to write this. Hopefully later today this will be 500 words.
Shadow Queen covered it all so I just get to love on it🤭 I like the way you discribed the eyes, by calling them piercing, it kind of set the mood! Overall good job! It is short but it is pretty good🤍🤍✨✨🤍🤍
This was so cool with the description. I wish it was longer! You asked for feedback by checking the box before posting, I only have two pieces of feedback:
Avoid using the same words multiple times, this can bore your readers. For example: you said, “Their piercing blue eyes staring directly into my eyes.” Could be changed to, “Their piercing blue eyes stared directly into mine” or either continue by “into my own green eyes, widened in surprise”. That way you keep the meaning, but don’t use the same words so close together. In the second example, I used the same word, but put space between them. Which helps. ;)
And the last (very small) bit: in most books, “7” would not be allowed. You would have to change it to “seven”. But here, eh. 😂
I hope I’m not being annoying- ☹️ I did like this. 🖤
