The sea crashed hard,
But not like your death,
One day, here,
The next, only fear
Your death
Crushed
Me
Until I couldn't breathe
Why'd you have to go,
And leave me alone?
Your death
Crushed
Me
Life without you
I can't begin to imagine
Without your too-strong coffee
And messy attempts at sorry
Your death
Crushed
Me
I’m loving the pattern. The repetition and the way you chose to frame your words 💯!
My only recommend would be to end with “Why’d you have to go?” one last time. Your pattern has a natural push and pull. Every time you hit “your death crushed me” it flows back out again. What I suggested would just be a way to “complete the pattern” if that makes sense 🙃 Your poem is excellently done!
