WRITING OBSTACLE
Describe a pet you have, or would like to own, without mentioning their appearance.
Removing the sense of sight gives an opportunity to lean into the other ways that we distinguish animals.
WRITING OBSTACLE
Describe a pet you have, or would like to own, without mentioning their appearance.
Removing the sense of sight gives an opportunity to lean into the other ways that we distinguish animals.
Thank you for sharing your poem! I really enjoyed reading it and wanted to share some thoughts.
Strengths:
• Emotion: The feelings you conveyed were powerful and relatable. I appreciated how you expressed romance, making it resonate with readers.
• Structure: The flow of your poem was smooth, and the rhythm complemented the overall tone beautifully. It felt intentional and well-crafted.
Suggestions:
• Line Breaks: Consider experimenting with line breaks to enhance the pacing. Some lines felt a bit lengthy, and breaking them up could add emphasis and impact.
• Word Choice: While your word choices were generally strong, there were a few places where a more unique word or phrase might add an extra layer of depth.
Overall, this is a fantastic piece! I love the direction you’re taking with your poetry, and I encourage you to keep writing. I’m looking forward to seeing more of your work in the future!
Nice one, really nice