STORY STARTER
You wake up in bed one morning, and immediately notice something isn't right...
Continue the story. Focus on the thoughts of your main character and the possibilities that lie ahead.
STORY STARTER
You wake up in bed one morning, and immediately notice something isn't right...
Continue the story. Focus on the thoughts of your main character and the possibilities that lie ahead.
š± I was genuinely shocked! Your pace lulls the reader into such a peaceful state and then ya knock em out with that final sentence!
Feedback: Your writing (your descriptive work most especially) is really solid. Iām impressed! The only tweak Iād suggest - that last line has both a soothing description and a knockout. Iād split it and have that ā30 years agoā bit be itās own paragraph. Then itāll really pop!
āā¦.covered in a vine of rosesā ācool breeze that brushes your skinā āscent of baconā āDadās whistleā¦ā Way to involve the senses!