The walls are covered in a vine of roses, yellow dots weave their way to the ceiling. Sheer white curtains blow gently, carrying a cool breeze that brushes your skin. The scent of bacon creeps into your senses, but something else stirs within, a calmness and security, that of a well cared for child. Dad's whistle fills the hallway outside the door and you realize you have awoken in your childhood bed.
Just as you did 30 years ago.
š± I was genuinely shocked! Your pace lulls the reader into such a peaceful state and then ya knock em out with that final sentence!
Feedback: Your writing (your descriptive work most especially) is really solid. Iām impressed! The only tweak Iād suggest - that last line has both a soothing description and a knockout. Iād split it and have that ā30 years agoā bit be itās own paragraph. Then itāll really pop!
āā¦.covered in a vine of rosesā ācool breeze that brushes your skinā āscent of baconā āDadās whistleā¦ā Way to involve the senses!
