Why did it take her?
I look for any sign.
I couldn’t find anything anywhere.
She may be truly gone.
After all this, there’s nothing.
Not a single thing left.
I don’t want to believe.
But the trail’s gone cold.
I won’t get her back.
Nice! I didn’t read the prompt before reading this, and I now really like how you wrote this. It’s not very obvious that the sentences are five words because it flows so nicely. 👏👏
A piece of feedback would be to consider the space you added between each sentence. While it doesn’t have to all be one paragraph, I don’t think it’s necessary to have each sentence a paragraph of their own. (Of course, there may be another reason for this that I’m missing, in which case, ignore what I just said).
Any other feedback would be to add a couple more (short) sentences to add emotion. It can seem a little dry since we don’t know what the main character is really feeling or how important ‘her’ was to the protagonist.
This was really great. Short while being interesting, and making us wonder what happens after it finishes. Honestly, I really just love your writing in general. Keep it up! 😊
