POEM STARTER

Write a poem with the title “Opening the Cupboard”.

There are many routes that you could take in this poem. Skeletons in the closet, scenes of domestic life, a metaphor for revelation?

Opening the Cupboard

Poetry

A twisting flower spun and swirled

Sliver straw hair rotated and whirled

Sucker stained lips sang airy tunes

A dazzling spotlight around her grew

Never too much never too less

Always thought she was truly blessed

When her pirouette petals no longer turned

Her sliver straw hair braided not birled

There were less airy tunes

Gliding to the top

Glossy lips smiled

When eyes could not

The spotlight dimmed

The world no longer gazing

At her incredulous grin

And so she peeled back the weeping wood

An abyss holding everything it could

At last she realized the truth

This was the end she never knew

Comments 3

Fragglet

3 years ago

Just when I think ‘you haven’t uploaded in a while’ or you’ve left the app, you come back with a blinder! 🙌🏼✨⭐️

I guess you’re like me and take breaks 😂

I know there’s poetic license so forgive my curiosity but ”(A) sliver (of) straw, or ‘Silver’ straw? My brain ALWAYS tries to find silver, no matter the context. 🤣🤣

I can’t help but feel this character has had multiple meetings (or potential meetings) with the end and therefore might toy with the last line to read:

“This was the ending she never knew”

But absolutely no biggie. Don’t feel forced to make a change as “end” still works.

I loved the imaginary and perspective. An evocative poem that-as It’s read, creates a feeling of emptiness and loss. Way to write about a cupboard! 🙌🏼💯⭐️

Natalie

I am a teen writer who is just trying to do some lighter writing in between projects. I appreciate any feedback and enjoy reading any story. I am also still trying to find my style so sorry if I jump between styles in my stories :)