STORY STARTER
Write a horror story that takes place at a birthday party.
Help the co-founder of Daily Prompt celebrate his birthday today, by writing in his favourite genre!
STORY STARTER
Write a horror story that takes place at a birthday party.
Help the co-founder of Daily Prompt celebrate his birthday today, by writing in his favourite genre!
Good imagination with the story and premise. I have Some pointers as I’m reading through. Try and avoids describing the weather to begin with. It doesn’t add much to the story and, especially in a short story, I want to be hear about the story and characters than whether it’s a drab day cold night.
You say the clouds drip loudly against the ground but all this forms a subtle noise drowning out a silence. This doesn’t really make sense. Is the sound loud or subtle? There wouldn’t be any silence either way.
You tell the finding of the blood on the floor a bit passively. In this case I, as the reader, would want to feel as though I’m in the room too, so think about the smells and sights rather than just telling me there is blood on the floor.
You tell us the characters speak but don’t actually show us this as part of the story. Melonie exclaims something to Kory but they are meant to be in hiding.
There’s some contractions. You can’t quietly yell. Kory can’t stand tall if she has fainted.
Thank u ;)
Wow just wow this was... Wow! Great job.
Part 2...
In those few most valuable seconds kory grabbed at her pocket for her fork and held it low and facing out, she knew he’d be quick and attempts at killing or torturing her so if he whipped himself back quick enough he’d not notice the fork and push himself right into it.
And he did and the fork stabbed right into his lower body and he fell to the ground fast. He snarled and yelled till he went unconscious but not dead. Kory was frozen, she had just witnessed her sisters dead like body on the ground along with the blood everywhere else. Now she had just wounded a man... no a murderer.
She lifted her sisters body and carried it out to the main part of the restaurant. Calming herself down kory walked back in to see the man, and her friends for the party all lying there along the edges of the room. Some may be dead but maybe not all. So one by one she tugged them out the where she had left her sister and checked for a pulse. 7 out of 10 were alive. Thank god, thank god not everyone died. But 3 of her friends had perished. But this was no time to linger in depression when the murderer was still in that room and alive. So she grabbed at all they’re pockets to find a phone she could call help with and found one. Kory called 911 as fast as her fingers could and she then fainted. Collapsed from the loss of adrenaline to wake up in hospital. That’s all.
Damnnn O•O