WRITING OBSTACLE

Write a short dialogue that reveals much more about the narrator than the person they are talking to.

Often when writing from the narrator’s perspective, the reader’s attention is on what the narrator is seeing and hearing. By inverting this, a great sense of character can be created. What does their conversation reveal to the reader?

Amiss

The light is dimming by the minute. I notice it makes the swelling sky ever more impenetrable. Darkness seems so eager to devour everything… “I said, I’m really gonna miss you”, she almost whispers. I realise I wasn’t quite listening. It’s just the two of us in this big empty parking lot. “Now now, let’s not get carried away, shall we? I’ll only be away for a couple of months. No big deal!”, I say cheerily. “You’re doing it again!” She looks somewhat crossed. “Doing what?” “You’re pushing me away, as you always do when you feel like I’m getting too close.” I keep my cool, “I haven’t the dimmest idea what you’re talking about. Come here, let me give you a hug to prove you wrong…” “Fuck your hugs and fuck your stupid act!” She shoves me back. I know I can recover from this. “If you didn’t like hugs, you could’ve just told me, Shirl. I can do back rubs, how about that?” “You know what I hate about you, Rob?” She’s on the verge of tears for some reason, “…You know what? Forget it…” I barely hear these words as she’s turning away and leaving. I grab her wrist, “Shirl! Shirl. Since when can’t you take a joke?” Her look incinerates me. I let go. “Alright then, see you in a few weeks, ok?” I don’t think she’s heard this as she’s already slammed the door of her car shut. As she disappears in the charred horizon, I feel that something somewhere in my body is amiss.
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