POEM STARTER
‘Final whispers wandered away without care.’
Write a poem that concludes with this line.
Sweating Weather
I dream of a snowfall with all the white, winter glory that I’ve read in stories, that I’ve seen in movies, and I want it truly, you see.
I want a winter fair with icy stairs that I have to hold onto the rail or lose my footing.
I wish for a cold, so profound as to implode the idea of cold in this summer utopia of the sad soggy south in Alabama.
I want it to freeze, to seize up every road, every highway headed to or from my way, so there’s no way in the world to thaw in less than two weeks.
I desire a spire, a wire, attire to roast weenies in the snow around a bonfire, basking in the falling snowflakes and pleasant conversations.
I hope to sit in twos, wearing warmer winter shoes, sharing stories of times long gone like final whispers wandered away without care.
Lovely poem. The internal rhyme gives it a whimsical, floating quality which complements the imagery.
Great opening: “I dream of snowfall with all the white winter glory that I’ve read in stories”
Just a couple of grammar bits I noticed:
“Lose my footing” and “sit in twos”
Ah, good catches! Thanks for the read and the grammar tips 👌
I really really love this word play and imagery.. love the way you describe the characters love of winter and cold.. I found myself wanting to see it written in maybe a more classic poetic style.. simply because I felt like the phrasing/wording called for it.. forcing me to pause to emphasize the word play.. hope that makes sense..
but really lovely
I get that. I generally try to separate my rhymes for emphasis, but I suppose I just wanted this one to be the way it is. It does, however, make it easier for the average reader to skip over the rhymes somewhat but hey, wacha gonna do? Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!