POEM STARTER
‘All that glitters is not gold.’
Write a poem that begins with this line. What might this common saying lead you to explore?
POEM STARTER
‘All that glitters is not gold.’
Write a poem that begins with this line. What might this common saying lead you to explore?
I’ll try to leave constructive feedback, but I don’t have much to offer… it’s well written.
I love the analogy and message of this poem. Your metaphors are really good. It’s also so relatable… sort of made me think you were reading my mind. This is the kind of emotional poem that you feel when you read it because the struggle you write about is fairly universal. You put a lot of emotion into it and it comes across well.
The rhyme scheme is consistent and simple, which I like. It had a good structure. The emotions were complex, so I felt like the simple predictable structure was good because it let me focus on those emotions rather than trying to follow the structure.
The pace varied, and that worked out well here. Playing with the length of each line can force readers to speed up or slow down, which affects how the poem reads and feels. In this case, the slowest pace is when you are reflecting on the past in the second stanza. You let the good emotions linger before ripping them away with realty in the next stanzas that had shorter lines. If it was intentional well done! If not, it’s something to be mindful of because it can really add to a poem like this.