STORY STARTER
Submitted by an anonymous Daily Prompt user.
"She's not who she says she is."
Write a story that involves this line of speech.
STORY STARTER
Submitted by an anonymous Daily Prompt user.
"She's not who she says she is."
Write a story that involves this line of speech.
Beautifully written.
“She’s a storm. Ready to attack.” - this was a powerful beginning. Loved it. Loved how you used two powerfully short sentences to lead into a more descriptive punch.
“She’s a grand oak standing firm and proud in the presence of all and against all opposing forces.” - This sentence gave me a little trouble when reading. You know when something just doesn’t seem to flow perfectly, and you have to reread it? This was the only sentence that did that for me in this piece. Going back to the powerfully short entry sentences, maybe you could do this with this paragraph… “She’s a grand oak. She stands firm and proud, defying all opposing forces.” Just a thought- I’d just really like to see you upkeep that punch you had going! It seems like the rest of the paragraphs start off with those short sentences, and it’s a great theme.
Cheers!