cloudier

desolate and gloomy and happier than any laugh that grates from a throat that has never known tears and screams for any end the path winds through the tall gray grass and cuts the sky in two i’ve never known a cloudy sky to be cloudier than you

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💚 Froggy 💚

2 years ago

This is such a good descriptive poem! I love it a lot! One little thing is that ‘knowing’, in the 9th line, should be ‘known’. Just a little mistake, but that doesn’t take away from the amazing poem <3

(I also recommend capitalizing the starts of sentences to make it more polished, but it really doesn’t matter)

G. N. Solomon

Poet, artist, and author. Hoping to share my work in a casual and open-ended way that can spur me to new creative depths