WRITING OBSTACLE
red
orange
yellow
Describe a sunset without using any colours that relate to the listed words. You must use metaphors and descriptions that reflect them, but not use the words for these colours.
WRITING OBSTACLE
red
orange
yellow
Describe a sunset without using any colours that relate to the listed words. You must use metaphors and descriptions that reflect them, but not use the words for these colours.
This is a very poetic piece filled with brilliant descriptions. Well done!
I like the image of pinpricks lingering on blades of grass. And I love the image of the sun ripening and therefore beginning to fall like ripe fruit would. Although, combining both of these images in the same sentence broke the image for me as I didn’t think they were so linked. As two separate images, this was perfect.
You repeated “a bit of magic” twice in very quick succession. Perhaps changing things up a bit there might have sounded better.
The image of the colours “bleeding” into the magic was perfect!
I really like the idea of magic being a physical thing; and you did a great job at painting this image for the reader.
“All the possibilities of a new day rested in the palm of her hand” - this is powerful!
This was brilliantly done. Well done.