STORY STARTER
Submitted by Celaid Degante
Leaving
Write about a character leaving something, or someone, they love.
STORY STARTER
Submitted by Celaid Degante
Leaving
Write about a character leaving something, or someone, they love.
I really like how you don’t specify that the one the narrator has to leave is a dog, and it’s only for a short while. It’s an excellent twist on the prompt.
I think it would flow better if the dog’s name is used, instead of being referred to as “she” exclusively throughout.
I feel like the lines “She is instantly a new dog” and “Silly dog” feel a little out of place. I think it would work better to use only context clues to explain to the audience that the dog is a dog, instead of stating it directly. That’s just my personal take, though.
I hope this feedback is useful to you!