WRITING OBSTACLE
red
orange
yellow
Describe a sunset without using any colours that relate to the listed words. You must use metaphors and descriptions that reflect them, but not use the words for these colours.
WRITING OBSTACLE
red
orange
yellow
Describe a sunset without using any colours that relate to the listed words. You must use metaphors and descriptions that reflect them, but not use the words for these colours.
I want to know more about this creature! Who or what is it and what is it coming out to do? Intriguing!
Things I would think about editing - some of your sentences are really long which makes them hard to read. Also. Adjectives are good but sometimes I think you have a few too many. “Sensitive, large, leafy wings” for example. And the sand- white, perfect, cleanliness, untouched - it’s a bit too much all saying the same thing.
I love the imagery of the ocean as a thief stealing the sun! Clever.
A few other places you are kind of wordy - “Despite all of this” and “Nonetheless” is kind of unnecessary, for example.