WRITING OBSTACLE

Write a gossip session between two friends which suddenly turns very serious.

How can you use dialogue and speech tags to convey the change of tone?

Didn't You Hear

"Hey Tom,"


"What?" he says grudgedly knowing Derrick wishes to prate once more.)


"Guess what I heard today?" Derrick says excitedly while bouncing his shoulders up and down in a wave fashion.


"What did you hear today?" he says while rolling his eyes.


"Flentha djenf djsbrjyb gnsjrb jtjsb Ena"


"Excuse me?"


"What? ... All I said was: Flentha djenf djsbrjyb gnsjrb jtjsb Ena"


"I'm so confused... Why are you saying gibberish?"


"Uhm (concerned) I'm not? ... I said: Flentha djenf djsbrjyb gnsjrb jtjsb Ena"


"Ughhhhhh, stop Tom, just speak normal!"


"Woah bro, no need to get angry, I didn't say anything wrong, like at all, like all I said is, Flentha djenf djsbrjyb gnsjrb jtjsb Ena"


"Ughhhhhhhhhh Stopppppp!!!"


"Hey Tom you doin' okay? You seem hjtjsb gnsjrb jfjs" Gil says as he approaches after hearing Tom's yell.


"You too?! What's happening to me?!" his eyes begin to water.


"Hey Derrick, let's being him to a hospital"


"Good idea, we can go down the one on jdjrbshe fbrhe"


"Just stop talking!!!" he screams with tears draining down his cheeks.


- at hospital 10 minutes later -


(Clatter of nurses)"How we doin with fheshshd? Is the baby a qwa or a qzxt"

"It's a qwa Susan."

"Yayy"

"Why is that so gjrhshey"

"Because fjfjsb, me and gjrhshey made a bet to see if the qwdrjs would be a qwa or a qzxt"


"Ahhhhhhhhhhh!!!" he let's out a scream "Will this nightmare ever end!!"


His tears flow so heavily that the hospital floor begins to quickly fill up. First it reaches his ankles, then knees, the thighs, then waist, then stomach, the torso, then neck, then "cough" "cough" "helppp!" "please somebody!!!" "helppp" "cough" "cough" he gags on the water and screams and cries as the water begins to fill his lungs. "Help..." Then the bubbles stop.

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"Clear!" thud-ump. Goes the difibulator,


"Gasp!!" Air returns to his lungs instead of water.


"Tim, You're alivee!"


"You were in a football tournament and you ran into the other guy really really hard." Gary says.


"Yeah! We rushed you to the hospital as fast as we could but the medicine they gave you caused a chemical reaction or something and your ears started getting infected and your body started drowning itself." Dominic says.


"Thank you Jesus!!!" Gary shouts.


"Ohh, thats what happened, I thought I'd never see you and Gil ever again."


"Me and Gil?"


"Yeah?"


"Uhm his names Gary. What's my name?"


"Derrick?"


"No Tim, my names Dominic."


Then he looked to his left and saw a gaping hole surrounded by cracks in the wall and through the hole he saw his corpse floating in a hospital room filled to the roof with water and then the door opened and the water came pouring out leaving his corpse on the ground. Then two screeming and crying young men come in through the door, "nooooo!" "ahhhhhh!" it was Derrick and Gil.


'It must be just an illusion from the football game.' (he thought to himself) 'I don't know, that was pretty realistic' then it hit him. Since he was unconscious and was suffering froma similar trauma, he switched consciences with the other version of him seen through the hole who was from another reality. Soon after his realization, the hole began to close, leaving behind a perfectly fine wall.



"Oh yeah, it must've simply forgot y'alls names from the defibrillator's harsh wake up."

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