STORY STARTER
Submitted by Celaid Degante
Leaving
Write about a character leaving something, or someone, they love.
I look at Lemon an Conner with a fake smile as I started to tear up at the same time with Lemon, I then ran over quickly an hugged her one more time before I left. Then that was it I was on my way to the town near by.
Thank so much for the feedback I appreciate it and I’m probably going to write this stuff down
Wow it’s great! Definitely can see the feeling. A few tips, the first sentence is a bit run on. I think to fix this you could put a period after the word smile, and for the next sentence start with “With the first glance, I began to tear up” into the rest of it. Also, in your third sentence a coma is needed: “Then that was is, I was on my way to the next town over”. Lastly, I think maybe you used ‘an’ instead of ‘and’ in a few places? Anyway, I loved the story, keep writing! 😄
