STORY STARTER
As your character learns more and more about the cult that their family narrowly escaped, they find themselves agreeing with many of the cult's ideas...
STORY STARTER
As your character learns more and more about the cult that their family narrowly escaped, they find themselves agreeing with many of the cult's ideas...
Sounds a bit odd at first because you wouldn’t stare wide eyed at a tale. It’s indivisible. Would make it clearer if you mentioned Ingrid was listening to the tale, as I got confused at first wondering if you misspelled tail.
You did get me interested in the ERFG but you cut it off too short! I would have liked to have known what Venus was going to say about them. I get you wanted to leave it a mystery but with the question you pose at the end you want the reader to make up their own mind, except in this case, all I can tell is that the cult does group. Without the prompt for context I wouldn’t know they are sinister.