The stars were what she liked most about the sky.
Then, they started to fall.
Her whole life they stood strong and immovable,
But now they plummeted to earth.
Beautiful.
Bright.
Wonderful.
To touch them would be her greatest wish.
They grew larger as they approached.
She stretched out her longneck.
Closer.
Closer.
Soon.
BOOM.
Is the character portrayed perhaps a dinosaur? I immediately jumped to this conclusion and rather enjoyed it. Sort of like a “what it was like as a dinosaur watching the meteor falling to earth.”
The idea of admiring the stars, being excited about seeing them coming towards you, reaching out to touch them, and then having them end all life is very poetic. The imagery was very good to convey that in my opinion. A very tragic story.
The free form structure worked well for controlling the pace for me. The few longer lines/stanzas made things slow down a bit and added a sense of wonder. The short choppy lines made things seem fast and haphazard. Overall well done.
