POEM STARTER
Submitted by Freddie
Life Without You
Write a poem or short story about what life would be like without the person you care about the most.
I will not go without
Wherever you go, sweet child
I will follow closely.
Without you,
life was without magic.
Without sunshine
And without meaning.
Basically, it was hella tragic.
So I know without a shadow of doubt
I cannot go without
~love letters to the Divine Child within š¤
Ooo I really like this one! If I were to quote what I liked, Iād basically just cut and paste your entire poem.
Going off of Spencerās feedback, I have an idea for you š if your first and last lines are their own stanzas, it might help the eye and force the reader to pause. I see why youād need to keep those lines since they tie the poem together. This way, not only will they read differently, the lines themselves will be alone (orā¦without) giving them that lonely feel you seem to be evoking. Hope this helps!
This is so pretty! I really like the āhella tragicā lol. The first two lines were a little clunky, iāll be honest, i had to reread them a couple times before i continued. But other than that everything flows really well! Great job!
