VISUAL PROMPT
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'The Lake'. Write a crime, mystery, or horror story about what happened at this location.
VISUAL PROMPT
by Thomas Griesbeck @ Unsplash
'The Lake'. Write a crime, mystery, or horror story about what happened at this location.
I noticed you use a lot of dialogue tags, i would try to cut down on this as it’s repetitive and and eventually bores the reader. Once you have established who is talking who don’t always have to include the tags.
I also noticed you used the characters names quite a lot, from what i can tell these two characters go by he and the other by she, which means in this case you could use those more than their names.
Otherwise amazing story and i really enjoyed reading it. Kevin is a little crazy but for some reason I like it, lol.