Heartbreak
Coffee on cold mornings
sugar is too sweet
Without you here
Take a hike
Look at the nature
Gorgeous
Everything is tainted
Music
drown it all out
nothing is worth hearing
I miss you
Youre better off
Without someone
Like me
Find your happy ending
You deserve it
Find your prince charming
If wasn’t me
I miss you
Beautiful poem ❤️
A lovely little poem, you’ve done really well to capture the emotions and instil a sense of emptiness that comes with a breakup.
Two very minor points to help you grow as a writer:
- Double check your grammar, there is one ‘youre’ where you’ve missed an apostrophe.
- Re-read and see if there are any extra words that can be removed without losing the feeling that you are creating.
An example., ‘Sugar is too sweet’ could you say ‘Sugar too sweet’ instead to aid in a smoother flow?
Keep up your writing, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future!! :)
Oh my gosh your so beautiful! Your writing really moved me. No girl deserves your time 🥹
