STORY STARTER
When a person meets the love of their life, they unlock an extra sense.
Write about how your protagonist discovers theirs, and what it turns out to be.
STORY STARTER
When a person meets the love of their life, they unlock an extra sense.
Write about how your protagonist discovers theirs, and what it turns out to be.
Nice take on the prompt. If Iâm reading it correctly, sounds like the story is set in a place where government restrictions impact where families can live, how they live, etc. Also, seems that the government dictates who marries, based on a status of Soulmate (that is discovered once the âsoulmatesâ connect with each other, unlocking new senses).
Did I get all that right?
If so, thatâs an awesome setting! Iâd love to see it more developed.
Also, I assume the main character is a girl of about 16 (it may have been explicitly stated and I missed it). So, for simplicity, Iâll use she/her.
Story notes you can take/leave as you se fit:
A lot of telling, not much showing. Iâd focus on giving the reader relevant details through action-based discovery when possible. Example: Consider starting the story in the middle, then revealing how the main character got to a place where sheâs moving into a new house, meeting new people.
Maybe show how their lack of specific senses impacts them negatively through story elements. Conversely, are their seemingly negative impacts to gaining these new senses (the âyou stinkâ line hints at this).
How does the main character know that bacon and candles and garlic bread smell good? Maybe show other people in the family having a positive reaction to it, while she is left wondering. (But maybe she has to keep her little bro from burning himself on the bacon pan because he has yet to get his sense of touch)
âNotionâ is usually reserved for thought. Maybe go with sensed (or some synonym)?
The âI can actually hear nowâ line is funny, but underwhelming for a pretty significant moment. Hearing and understanding are also worlds apart. That might be worth putting some more time into, could provide a pretty emotional experience for them both.
âWe lined at each other in annoyanceâŠâ âlookedâ maybe?
Overall, I love the general world this creates and the potential for rich stories. Well done.