As the hazy light filtered through the trees
The reflection of my thoughts became more at ease. Rays of lights breaking free,
to clear the route of my forbidden dreams.
the same warrior who must set sea.
With no maps nor compass
Polaris points me East.
Directions so vibrant, a sense of love pushes the breeze. waves rushed with passion guiding me to foresee, what it truly means
To live with internal peace.
This feels like a meditation. Both my praise and my feedback will hinge on this vibe.
“To clear the route of my forbidden dreams” is so stunningly meditative. Especially with the “hazy light” you’ve got going earlier. Sooo sooo peaceful and peace giving!
As for the structure of this piece, it may serve you to break this up like each statement is a push of breath. Every time you might need to breathe in, it’s an indicator to start a new line. It’ll ease the work done by your eyes while also imitating that spaciousness your words provoke. Thanks for sharing!
