VISUAL PROMPT
Art by Sans @ www.deviantart.com/Sanskarans.

Write a horror or thriller version of a classic Christmas tale.
VISUAL PROMPT
Art by Sans @ www.deviantart.com/Sanskarans.
Write a horror or thriller version of a classic Christmas tale.
This would be a good story starter for a children’s book. The language used is easy to read and doesn’t use complex words.
The plot development is very rapid. It jumps from scene to scene in such a short period of time.
The originality is fitting as it is as based on the visual prompt.
Character development is fine but I would like to have known a bit more about the girl, Santa and even the mother.
Writing feedback. Unless it was intentional or not but your sentences can be very long and so it was hard for me to keep up.
Otherwise, good start