As I walk and walk my weight feels lifted as the gold specks float upon me. I feel the glow on my face and a warm presence near. I look up at the golden birds flying loops above the trees. I watch as the squirrels squint at the sparkling light. I watch as the forest comes to life in only a matter of seconds.
Hi! I love the story! It brings the reader into the setting and event quick and diss a great job explaining the surrounding area! The only thing I’d say is to show what’s happening rather than tell it. I think the best place to do that here could be describing how the forest comes alive at the end, rather than just stating that it comes alive. Overall I think it was a great short story! Can’t wait to read more!
