STORY STARTER
Write a diary entry from someone who believes that they are truly the first to have discovered something.
What would this feel like?
A Shocking Discovery
Dear diary
I think I just discovered something. I am pretty sure I am the first to know about this.
Oh my gosh! Good thing my parents don’t know. I think they would kill my brother if they find out.
I pray that Tyler doesn’t get mad at me for knowing his secret. I don’t think he realized he left this in my room. It must’ve fallen out of his backpack. When he was helping me with my schoolwork.
I can not Believe it! My older brother has been vaping. I hear the door open and slam shut. Oh no! Tyler is home.
What do I do with this vaping thing? Should I hide it? Or leave it where it was? And just pretend I never saw it? Or maybe I should just come to him clean. And tell him the truth. And pray he will understand. Well whatever I decide I need to do it fast. Before he comes knocking at my door. Until next time. My trusty diary.
Heart pounding! What happened?! Love the cliffhanger, and the pacing was very well done. My favorite of your writing so far!
Well done, Moon Halo! I liked the suspense you built at the start where you didn’t reveal what you’d discovered until several lines later.
I like that you added the extra tension in the middle of the piece with Tyler returning home. In some ways, I would have loved to see you explore that dialogue and see how it could come across 😁
Keep it up!!
This takes me back to my diary writing days haha very nostalgic. It was a fun read 😊
I love that. I bet that it’s written by a character representing his little sis. I also love the way that at the beginning you’re made to feel like it’s something really horrendous. It ends up being something as simple as vaping but she’s really worried. It’s great.
