The world is upside down.
No one enjoys school anymore,
I’m not in a relationship now,
I don’t have a friend group now.
The world is upside down.
I drift through life,
Only stopping here and there.
People don’t want to learn about my hobbies,
Crocheting, hunting, reading.
Everyone has their own interests.
The world is upside down.
Or is it that I’m upside down?
Oy! Heylo friend! Juuust stopping by your profile to say you’re awesome 💜 and the poetry is a pleasant surprise. Super relatable!
This poem has a strong opening, immediately establishing the theme of being upside down and the context of high school. The poem is lyrical and short enough to capture the feeling of loneliness and confusion in an evocative way.
To make it even more interesting, however, you could consider using specific examples in the second two stanzas to illustrate or explain these feelings. For example, instead of “People don’t tend to share multiple hobbies with me,” try “No one offers to share their interests with me.” This more focused language adds more depth to the image of loneliness and brings the poem further into the realm of narrative.
Overall, the poem is very well-crafted and could be improved even further with the addition of some small, specific details.
Please let me know if this was helpful or, what you’d like me to focus more on in the future.
