STORY STARTER
Having done this before, I convinced myself that nerves were unusual but not unexpected.
Write a short story beginning with this line. What might the character be well-practised but still apprehensive about?
STORY STARTER
Having done this before, I convinced myself that nerves were unusual but not unexpected.
Write a short story beginning with this line. What might the character be well-practised but still apprehensive about?
Nice piece, Habito! You caught my attention and kept it throughout. There were a lot of things you wrote that piqued my interest and got me to keep reading. Such as "I tried a smile as I had seen others do, but he just looked more scared." This got me wondering about the narrator and who/what they are.
Watch out, there were some little mistakes/typos throughout the piece which could maybe have been picked up through another proofread. For example “Do you know why your here?” - it should be YOU'RE.
Also: "...he had just took a glance at death himself." It should read "he had just taken..."
Overall, I thought you did well here. You painted an interesting picture of this narrator. They actually came across very confident throughout the piece so perhaps not continuing to exemplify the apprehension mentioned in the opening line.