STORY STARTER
Heavy footsteps that shook the earth. A guttural roar promising violence. The monster appeared from the darkness, and the soldiers froze.
This was the wicked monster?
STORY STARTER
Heavy footsteps that shook the earth. A guttural roar promising violence. The monster appeared from the darkness, and the soldiers froze.
This was the wicked monster?
A great first two lines! I wonder if ‘promising’ could be more powerful and simply be turned into ‘promised’. It has a more ‘active’ feeling for me, what do you think?
You have ‘outline villages’ was that spell correct sneakily changing the word: outlying?
What do think about a different form of punctuation here: “The court expected them to return valiant—a bloodied, severed…” (Great image, by the way!)
Oooo, “a pink-fleshy husk of Sir Elizabet”—very interesting!
😂”…and her skin gave the appearance of a crispy Crème brûlée.”👏
Double giggles! (though I feel sorry for them): “The lower citadel soon filled with frightened, half-baked peasants…”
Uh-oh, a wyvern compared to a kitten! Kittens’ teeth and claws are as sharp as newly honed razors!😩🤕
Wonderful: “…the pearls of its teeth snapping at a passing butterfly.”
🏆Masterful Dialog Award🏆 You must have a lot of these trophies!!!
Amazing image, this too deserves a ✨🏆✨: “Metal bodies stumbled back, their sabatons (no apostrophe—I think) digging trenches in the dirt.”
This wily serpent spewed an ‘A’! “‘Who knows how long we will survive.” A
😂🤢”…and Matilda tried not to think about how she could smell the kitchen after a feast of barbecued pork. She hoisted her shield above her head.”
This fiery wyvern is blasting words as well!: “The wyvern had snatched someone, Matilda realised. // closed // A sharp,…”
Great image, maybe some more punctuation: “…and Matilda scrunched her eyes as something soft—thumped—landed on top.” Or something like that!
A great read! Roasty and toasty just like an early morning should be!