Out of the dark sky
It gradually emerges
Crossing the horizon
As time continues forward
A blanket of warmth forms
Surrounding my soul
The prickling burn on my skin
Fills my heart with passion
Drawing me in for hours
Until it sets below the trees
Behind the mountains
Under the sea
All that is left
Is a faint memory
Of the light between you and me
Hey youāre back! Iāll be reading your other posts shortly āŗļø This oneās beautiful as always.
Creativity and originally - check!
Structure - I like that youāve divided this up into three lines per stanza. Itās digestible and cohesive. Tiny note in regards to flow: you may not need the word āgradually.ā Because of the number of syllables, it drags your pace a bit. Since in the earlier line you say āhoursā I think you donāt need to mention time once more. Up to you though!
āā¦a faint memory of the light between you and meā gorgeous way to end this :)
