POEM STARTER
Write a poem about something meaningful you were once told.
This could be a life lesson, a compliment, or a passing comment that stuck with you. Whatever it was, explore it in a poem.
POEM STARTER
Write a poem about something meaningful you were once told.
This could be a life lesson, a compliment, or a passing comment that stuck with you. Whatever it was, explore it in a poem.
I hope you find better days!
I’m really sorry for you!
Why am I the first person to be reading this?!!!!
This feels authentic. Real raw. Filled with emotion and insightful.
To be clear, I love the loosening of the tongue with “Utter shit”.
That said, I love that you chose not to saturate the piece with swear words. Swearing for effect can be awesome, but you handpicked your words perfectly.
Your word choices exhibited a delicacy befitting the subject matter. A delicate being.
“glimpse”✨
“blooming”✨
“Her eyes… picked up” ✨: perfectly expresses fragility and loss.
“There one moment and gone the next” : just a thought but think I would have omitted the “and” and inserted a full stop or comma. I think it would mirror that particular process. For example, it might feel a little harsher, choppy, disruptive, dramatic or intense.
“Only an echo” in isolation like that, really emphasises the emptiness!✨
“fast crawl” had me ticking🤔✨
This kind of poem, touches hearts. Great execution. ✨🙌🏼👏🏼Thank you for posting!