I like how you communicated the emotions. I like how you added in a little back story of you and your close friend, what made you guys close and how your going to miss them. You give the reader a little bit of the characters personalities by saying you used to chase these h*** around town and now you are in different lanes. That like made me giggle, typical boyish line. Maybe you could expand on this and add some physical features about your close friend so the reader can picture him like you do.
The originality of the piece is great as it feels personal, as if the writer them selfs are jotting down their feelings, drifting from their close friend! Your writing stands out because you are using your own lingo here, writing as you talk I presume.
Your plot is very clear and we know from reading, what message your trying to achieve. Everything is clear and you stick to the plot.
The only thing I think you should I work on here are, your spelling sometimes isn’t the best and full stops aren’t added to make actual sentences. So it can make it a bit hard for the reader to continue to read. Why not try and download a grammar/spell checking app. You can check your story before you post here, That’s what I do and it helps massively! So if you focus on your grammar and spelling ect you could create amazing writings!
I look forward to seeing more from you! Happy writing! 👍🏽
