The sweet scent of lavender overwhelmed me and the splashing of the waterfall filled my ears. Warm water rushed over me as I dived into the plunge pool.

My streamlined body zipped through the water until I came up for air, drying my body only moments later.

I rested on the side of the pool, feet dangling in as the waves lapped up to my knees. Soon enough, I got out and rushed to where I had left my bag. I opened it and took out my lunch.

Legs in the water again, I slowly ate my sandwiches and crisps. The crumbly bread melted in my mouth and fresh ham cooled my tongue.

Afterwards, I lay down, letting the sun soak into my skin and grass tickled my body. Then I got back in the pool, swimming fast until I was at the waterfall. Making sure nobody had just arrived, I dived under and into my secret den.

It wasn’t much, but I liked it. The crooked, wooden table and chairs I had made so long ago sat in the corner, giving me an almost nostalgic feeling. Pens and paper sat on the desk, begging for me to come over. So I did. I went over to finish my story.

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Author note

Hello,

I know you don’t really want to read this, so I’ll make it quick. I’m currently in year 10 studying for English and we are doing descriptive writing at the moment.

I was wondering if someone could give me some honest feedback about this piece of writing, (I will take all criticism!) as I am not very good so far and would appreciate some tips.

Thanks!