I am an aspiring actor and author. I appreciate honest feedback on my writing and try to use it as much as I can in future work.
I am an aspiring actor and author. I appreciate honest feedback on my writing and try to use it as much as I can in future work.
The boat rocked gently on the waves. Baking hot air burned the crew’s skin, blistering and cracking it. The bottle of water Leo poured down his back didn’t do much to help him. Sweat dripped off his forehead. Steam that rose from the ocean tickled his face.
Soon enough, it was all gone. The sea had dried up; everyone knew it would eventually, but not even Leo thought that it would look like this....
It was midnight, again. One more hour, and I’ll go to bed. I dimmed my laptop screen a bit more. Maybe I should get some sleep, actually. Fine... half an hour then I’m off.
“Nathan, wake up! I’m going to make breakfast.” My mum yelled. Wait, what? Already? Did I really stay up all night again?
“Coming,” I shouted back, trying to sound like I’d just woken up.
I still had my clothes on from yeste...
Junpir was a small planet, almost not even classed as one, but it had the cheapest prices.
We split the cost between the four of us and we each got a quarter of the area. Max got the part with the fields, Jonathon the forest, Poppy the meadow, and I got the city ruins.
It was our first day there, and we were all tired out from the ship ride. “See ya tomorrow, guys!” I said, getting out. We had a...
I rushed after Tomas, yelling at him.
“Stop!” I shouted again.
“Shush, Xander,” he hissed, “it might hear you!”
“It will kill us,” I whispered, “is it really this important?” I didn’t even know what it was! Why did I agree again?
“Yes,” he said, “now shut up.”
I grumbled and watched him dash forward, swinging his axe in the air. Why was I so stupid? I ran after him....
‘Technically,’ I thought, as I opened the door, ‘if I say part of the story and not the other then I’m not lying.’
“Where have you been?” Yelled my mum, rushing down the stairs, “you’ve been gone all weekend!”
“I had a sleepover,” I said quickly, “I don’t think my phone worked though so I couldn’t text you. I’m sorry.”
Obviously that’s not entirely true, but it’s not necessarily wrong. I was ha...
The sweet scent of lavender overwhelmed me and the splashing of the waterfall filled my ears. Warm water rushed over me as I dived into the plunge pool.
My streamlined body zipped through the water until I came up for air, drying my body only moments later.
I rested on the side of the pool, feet dangling in as the waves lapped up to my knees. Soon enough, I got out and rushed to where I had left...
The water was knee height when I walked out of my bedroom. What the hell had happened? My brand new school shoes were soaked and I head to even worn them one day yet!
“Mum!” I yelled, “What’s going on?”
The lights faltered for a second, springing on and off. Water gushed out from what seemed like nowhere. It was already up to my hip.
“Dad!” Dom cried out. I rushed towards his room, but I didn’t...