STORY STARTER
Submitted by Emotional Goblin.
A simple game of hide and seek becomes much more horrific when a kidnapper joins the game.
How will your characters uncover what's happening, and face the situation?
STORY STARTER
Submitted by Emotional Goblin.
A simple game of hide and seek becomes much more horrific when a kidnapper joins the game.
How will your characters uncover what's happening, and face the situation?
From the moment he notices the backpack behind the tree- this gets intense!
The opening felt a little drawn out and although you’re trying to set the scene, it feels a bit unnecessary as it doesn't add enough to the rest of the story. Maybe either going straight into the story or describing the setting whilst the tension is building could be another way to keep the reader engaged.
Loved the idea that he recognises the backpack but it's not who he thought it was. I'd loved to of seen more emotion and depth to that part of the scene as my heart was racing but the pace of the scene didn't seem to match it.
Just some thought, overall really great idea. 😊