Obvious

Poetry

Drama

It’s you,

So hopelessly.

And through,

So mercilessly.

It’s us,

So incredibly.

With trust,

Is understandingly.

It’s me,

So tirelessly.

With free,

So monumentally.

…

Love You Baby 🖤

Comments 2

Robert Weeks

2 days ago

I really enjoyed this poem. I feel like with so few words and such little context, it shouldn’t make sense, but it does and definitely does a great job of evoking the feeling of falling in love. One way it could improve would be by focusing on the first word of each line. The second word carries all of the weight, but different starting words could affect the concentration of the words slightly. Less repetition of the beginning word could also help it flow a lot more

MusefulHeart🫀

3 days ago

Amazing

Alnaja Smalls

3 days ago

Wonderful poem I like it

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