WRITING OBSTACLE

Submitted by Petit-Mythe

Describe someone walking through a field. Something important happened there - try not to reveal it until the very end.

Wesley, Wake Up!

Wesley’s bare feet sifted through the morning grass, cooling dew clinging to his ankles. The lingering moisture from the rain’s fog left the air heavy, and as Wesley paced through the village’s fields, his shoulders slouched with an unsettlingly heaviness.


The fields seemed to wilt with woe: the type of sorrow that held mysterious depth, not often uncovered. The trees wallowed in their roots, twisted and broken, their skeletal arms reaching for something unattainable. Wesley’s eyes narrowed into slits. Why did the fields look so strange today?


The sharp stillness of solitude surrounded Wesley in a tight embrace. He was alone.


Then—


A distasteful scent glided in the breeze. Burnt flesh.


Wesley’s brain stuttered in confusion, barely conscious before his foot caught on fabric. Something strange loomed at his feet.


_No… it can’t be… NO!_


With sobs caught in his throat, Wesley slowly pulled his gaze downwards. Beneath him, laid two unblinking, unfeeling eyes.


His own eyes.


The dead body was his.


“Wesley.” A voice, with a sweet lilt, emerged from darkness, echoing with strange intensity.


“Wesley, wake up.”


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Your eyes flash open.


The sky, too pale, glares below at you… and you wake up slowly… rubbing your head with a strange smile.


Grass pokes at your side.


The bony trees wave goodbye.


But the air tastes subtly like smoke, and when you inhale, it clings to your chest with familiarity—_Home_, she whispers.

Comments 10

wow!! i was so relieved at the ending that he wasn’t dead lol. i love the way you described everything from a farther view to make the character seem more dazed, and then you zoomed in when he saw his body. you always set the scene so well with your characters, i love that sm❤️

caraliaaa 💞💞 thank you SO MUCH! your kind comments always mean so much to me. i’m happy you said that! i’ve been trying to work more on setting the scene, like you said

OFC❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️AND THATS AMAZING

WOW!! 🤩 This is a fantastic write! Such a cool way to end it 🩵

thank you! you’re very kind! i’m glad you liked it 💗

Ooooo, now that, was good. Though I do wonder how he died by fire.

thank you for the nice comment!!! 💗and i definitely kept the story’s details vague, so it’s open to interpretation! if you have a guess i’d love to hear it

😮 that end! I like how it switched to second person!

💞 ❤️thank you so much!