POEM STARTER
Write a poem titled ‘Over The Hill’.
Is the title literal or a metaphor? See where this title can take you.
POEM STARTER
Write a poem titled ‘Over The Hill’.
Is the title literal or a metaphor? See where this title can take you.
Nice piece, Hannah. This is sadly relatable. It’s a sad reality growing up and seeing friends drop out of your life and less support from people around us. You captured this excellently.
I think this poem would have suited a nice simple rhyming theme, kinda like you did with lines 1 and 3 in the first stanza. But it’s not necessary. It was a well-expressed, well-executed poem.
If I had to comment on something, you might consider the way you word sentences sometimes. The first, for example, I think you ended the line in birthday to preserve the rhyme, but the sentence itself was a little complicated and perhaps should read like “Every birthday used to be so thrilling…”
Great piece, Hannah.