STORY STARTER
Subitted by Lexie Grenville
If he wasn't going to love me, he wasn't going to love anyone.
Write a story which starts or ends with this line.
STORY STARTER
Subitted by Lexie Grenville
If he wasn't going to love me, he wasn't going to love anyone.
Write a story which starts or ends with this line.
Wow I really liked this! It reminded me of a song called “Cell Block Tango” from the musical chicago. One of the merry murderesses had killed her husband for cheating on him, but didn’t even noticed until after she had done it! It does make me wonder though, did you do research on this topic? I am just asking because I truly want to know if that sort of thing happens in real life, where people sort of snap like that.
I do have one critique though (though it isn’t major, especially for a writing app). I feel like splitting some of your writing into multiple paragraphs would be very beneficial for the flow of your story. I think the part where you add dialogue is a great example for a place to separate into paragraphs. Typically lines of dialogue are separate from other paragraphs to show a specific person talking, and to help with the aesthetic flow of the writing. Lime I said though, this isn’t a huge deal for a prompt app like this one, but I couldn’t really find anything else to critique!
I’d like to also point out how great you are at showing and not telling. Like you didn’t specifically say the woman snapped, but it was implied whenever we suddenly see the two dead in the room.
Well done, and I hope this helped!