VISUAL PROMPT
Art by Vaghauk @ deviantart.com/vaghauk

Your character has just escaped the City of Death. Tell the story of what happened there.
VISUAL PROMPT
Art by Vaghauk @ deviantart.com/vaghauk
Your character has just escaped the City of Death. Tell the story of what happened there.
Loved this, Ian. Some exceptional onomatopoeic descriptions: “sickening crack of bones and gurgle of blood”, “clatter of armour”, “hot pain lashed across his face”.
The only clause that made me stall was “but the pain was fille and he could ignore it”. I wonder whether the story would work without this. It almost negates the clause before it and somehow makes his struggle to escape less heroic. Or trivialises his sacrifices.
Also, perhaps “doing his best to ignore” would work better as just “ignoring” or even “wincing at” to help keep pace.
These are just my thoughts—I’m a complete novice! Lovely work though :)
And also, fantastic app — I’m new but I’m loving everything I’m seeing so far. You’ve created a brilliant community!
Wow ! Really great , I was intrigued to know the next line with every one I read ! Really captivating and triggers some amazing images in my head x
Thanks very much and welcome to the app!
Looking forward to seeing what you come up with. If you have any questions feel free to get in touch.
I’m new to this app and this is the first one I’ve read and I think it’s really good!! I love your word choice well done ❤️